Zach Caldwell Posted January 8, 2018 Report Share Posted January 8, 2018 William King "Neon" Chapter 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted January 9, 2018 Report Share Posted January 9, 2018 Neon, a very nice beginning to this story. Joel is mostly drugged out on something. What for we do not know. Grid is another boy that help Joel. What's is his tail? Then there is Kato who is that? We just have a lot of questions. What has happened to Joel"s mom and Charlie? We will have to return to Joel's new world to find out. The best is they are three parts to this chapter one more interesting that the other. We will diffently be back. William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
William King Posted January 9, 2018 Report Share Posted January 9, 2018 12 hours ago, Jay said: The best is they are three parts to this chapter one more interesting that the other. We will diffently be back. There are three parts to every chapter, but I'm wondering which part might have been the "more interesting?" Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted January 9, 2018 Report Share Posted January 9, 2018 I think part three, "_you are exactly where you need to be". This part just adds to what you already knows. In this part we read of his mom and finds out who Charlie is ( his little brother ). We also read about the men in white coats? What would a mother take her two boys there? It answers a few questions and makes even more. That just leaves you wanting the next part to find out what you were not told. It just plays on the others two parts presenting more question than it answers keeping you reading just one more. William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
William King Posted January 10, 2018 Report Share Posted January 10, 2018 11 hours ago, Jay said: It answers a few questions and makes even more. That just leaves you wanting the next part to find out what you were not told. It just plays on the others two parts presenting more question than it answers keeping you reading just one more. Yes, it does exactly that. It jumps back in time and you find out a few things, then you are left wondering about what is actually going on. Now you know more than Joel, because he can't remember. You will find out even more in the next chapter and be introduced to some new characters... Jay 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adam Posted January 11, 2018 Report Share Posted January 11, 2018 I recall, whilst a boarder at a London prep and middle school, there was a television series entitled The Prisoner. It was shown too late for us to watch after singing vespers and doing preps, so it was recorded for older boys to watch on Saturday afternoons after sports. I think the masters used eight-track, for I know VCR hadn't been invented yet! Your Neon has marked psychological similarities in the first chapter - not in plot of course, but in mood and feelings of out-of-time-and-place. You have a knack of interposing your readers into the lives of your characters very quickly, both by your use of language and by your deft descriptive narrative. I envy your ability to capture scene so easily. I guess it comes with experience .....and age (LOL)! William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
William King Posted January 11, 2018 Report Share Posted January 11, 2018 The Prisoner staring Patrick McGoohan - "I am NOT a number, I am a FREE man!" I grew up watching this on TV, it's a classic and a cult television series from the sixties. I guess it must have influenced me, there were a lot of rather bizarre off the wall themes on television in the sixties. Maybe it had something to do with all the drugs floating around? In any event it was creative fiction that was thought provoking, anarchistic, anti-establishment. An era when subtle messages and points of view were expressed hidden in mainstream television that the powers that be didn't understand and dismissed as incomprehensible rubbish (at least that was what my parents thought) allowing it to be viewed by the younger generation! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zach Caldwell Posted January 15, 2018 Author Report Share Posted January 15, 2018 William King "Neon" Chapter 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted January 16, 2018 Report Share Posted January 16, 2018 A very good chapter with three parts once again. The BB Club, the center, and now the house. How do they all play together? What is the virus? As I said you get small answers and even more questions. We have to come back if we want any answers to our questions. William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zach Caldwell Posted January 22, 2018 Author Report Share Posted January 22, 2018 William King "Neon" Chapter 3 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted January 24, 2018 Report Share Posted January 24, 2018 A nice chapter. We know now it takes place in around 2167. The boys are at the house and safe for now. In this chapter we got to see some hot action. Which I will let you read for yourself, no spillers here. William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zach Caldwell Posted January 29, 2018 Author Report Share Posted January 29, 2018 William King "Neon" Chapter 4 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted January 30, 2018 Report Share Posted January 30, 2018 A wonderful chapter. More question than answers. What dose xcorp want with them? Where is everyone? The question just go on. Maybe next time we will get a few answers. Make you think of what they could be up to. I would think k they would welcome help to stop the rain? William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zach Caldwell Posted February 5, 2018 Author Report Share Posted February 5, 2018 William King "Neon" Chapter 5 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted February 6, 2018 Report Share Posted February 6, 2018 Another interesting chapter. The twins just missed the Xcop. They do not know how lucky they were. The Xcops seem to be getting closer to finding the boys? It seem they are smoking a lot and enjoying them self. How long will that last? What will happen when the twins meet Grif again? We may see next time as I enjoy reading this story. William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Castle Herald Posted February 12, 2018 Report Share Posted February 12, 2018 William King "Neon" Chapter 6 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted February 14, 2018 Report Share Posted February 14, 2018 Mark is at the house with the boys trying to get them to follow Kado. The more you read the more question about what is going on pop up. Then you get a few answers along the way. I have an idea what project weatherman is or was but I could be wrong. No matter I am just enjoying myself in reading this story. William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zach Caldwell Posted February 19, 2018 Author Report Share Posted February 19, 2018 William King "Neon" Chapter 7 And Chapter 8 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted February 22, 2018 Report Share Posted February 22, 2018 That was confusing. We moved to the year 6985 and a different plant. They were talking as if the story was that of a past event. We see two factions one ICEX and Masion with two different approaches to the problem. I am sure once we return thing will be more clear. No matter I am enjoying the read and that's the most important thing isn't it. William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
William King Posted February 22, 2018 Report Share Posted February 22, 2018 3 hours ago, Jay said: That was confusing... They were talking as if the story was that of a past event... I am sure once we return thing will be more clear. It is a bit of a shock. A look into the future. You will get to see more of that later. It kind of explains things, but not quite. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zach Caldwell Posted February 26, 2018 Author Report Share Posted February 26, 2018 William King "Neon" Chapter 9 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted March 1, 2018 Report Share Posted March 1, 2018 We see a lot of action going on in a small space of time. The important people are at the pods. The boys trying to get their friends and family to them. Will any of them make it? William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Castle Herald Posted March 5, 2018 Report Share Posted March 5, 2018 William King "Neon" Chapter 10 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jay Posted March 8, 2018 Report Share Posted March 8, 2018 Oh WOW, I did not see that coming. The story took on a completely different direction. A totally enjoyable read. You will have to read it yourself. You can not say much about this chapter without giving it away. I look forward to reading more next time. William King 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
William King Posted March 8, 2018 Report Share Posted March 8, 2018 Previously you had a glimpse into the future, now you know more. As you say - can't say much it would be a spoiler. Read on... resolution is in the next chapter - kind of! Jay 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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