Curtis

Talo, As an author with a story on the Castle, let me tell you. My story wound up averaging one year per chapter. The first ten took about 18 months. The last 5 took over ten years. I knew where I wanted the story to go, but getting it there was not so easy. I challenge you to try and write something worthy of the Castle. See how long it takes you to get 15 or twenty chapters in a cogent order. Curt

I also dropped this a point for spelling. In one paragraph, Ken kept calling Ameria, America. I also noticed several misspelled words. Still enjoy Ken's writing.

I do agree with Joe that there is need for editing. The other thing I see missing, at least for me, is what is up with the location? You talk about the old building. Is this after some type of disaster? Perhaps something about why Sammy is on the streets. Might give his character more "umph"